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Well, im joining. ( Prepare for pain xDDD ) ( Friends needed )

Started by Pika-Empress, December 17, 2006, 15:40

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Pika-Empress

(a)  Character name : Sindy Jun starbolt

(b)  Age and Gender : 13 and female

(c)  Description : Sindy Is 6"0 in height (heck my sister is that tall), her White hair is Straight, and Clothes are like my sprite: :
She is thin and taller aswell. Her Bands Are tighter, and her Skin is Paler, sindy wears White Lipstick aswell.

(d)  History : Sindy Was Raised in new bark Town, when She got her first pokemon, She Treasured her pokemon since, embarking on a adventure, Sindy has explored all the regions apart from kanto, she Keeps Chi safe, and has given her chickorita a Bandana to go around her neck, it is blue and red with green swirls, she is now at pallet town, searching for a training spot.

(e)  Friends and enemies :

Friends : None

Enemies : None

(f)  Pokémon


Chickorita
Female
Nickname : Chi
Moves :
1. Tackle
2. Growl
3. ---
4. ---

Joeno

Spelling, capitalization, use a proper subject and at the least try to expand the history further.
Peter <3<3<3<3

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Pika-Empress

Do i need to do anything else, i edited tell me if ive forgot anything/one

Joeno

Your capitalization does not fit common English rules, you still haven't run a spell check, the subject of your post still doesn't contain your character name and it's common to include the moves of your Pokemon. Also, you may want to mention who 'Chi' is - presumably your Chikorita, but you have not yet made this as explicit as it could be.
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Pika-Empress

i did spell cheak on word, tell me if i need to do it again.

Joeno

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Pika-Empress

Ive Put in a little more description, ive put my name in more often, Ive Mentioned Chi Is My Chickorita, And gave the moveset. Now Am i In?

Joeno

It is so incredibly difficult to only capitalize the first words of a sentence, proper nouns and the like? Why is a random 'is' capitalized in your text, while 'New Bark Town' isn't?
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