Working on a writing project...

[Hahex and Oshawott]

1)Well, they got what they asked for.

2)And that's all anyone really wanted to know.

3)Things passed like this, until The Game had been downloaded a thousand times.

1) This line seems a little too "chatty" if you get what I mean. And actually, in the grand scheme of things, its not really essential to the introduction. I would rephrase it or just plain cut it.

2) If you don't want to get into the details of how the VARC works, then fine, but I feel this line highlights that you don't actually have an idea on how the idea is plausible a little much? Maybe it's essential to the overall plot or something but this line sticks out a little too much for some reason. Its good that it helps build tension a little, and honestly I can't really think of what to replace it with. With the phrase "The simple version", you're sort of leading up to a "the longer version."  Perhaps if this is written from the first person, although this idea might seem to contradict what I've said, you could try "They tried to explain the full mechanics to me once but I don't particularly care" or whatever reason is appropriate to the person. "The specifics of the mechanism are thus far irrelevant to this story/article/report."

3) Just a small niggle, maybe "downloaded thousands of times" is better than a weirdly specific "thousand times".

Also, correct me if I'm wrong, but I don't think anyone here has any particular training or expertise in creative writing, or at least I don't. So at the very least, choose not to listen to me at your own digression because at this point I'm just being really picky for no real reason. I'm not a rapper writer. 

[OpalRhea]

I don't like people with training in creative writing. I write to have people enjoy it, not to have literaries pick apart what social/ecconomical/eviromental/political commentaries/metaphors/etc I'm making. I write to write stories. That's why I'm listening to you guys instead of taking it to the creative writing teacher at my old school.

as to one. I personally like the feel of it, but the wording doesn't work anymore. I'll try to reword it.
Two's kinda... To be fair, the intro is kinda an omnipotent perspective world building thing. I could put the full explanation, but in the original draft of ver 2 (before i typed it up and put it up here), it felt clunky, awkward, and out of place. I felt that it would both bore readers, and annoy people who actually would have known how the thing would have worked. Thus why I was so vague. Would it be better if I changed it to "And that's all most people wanted to know." ?
Three. Yeah. I have wanted to reword that. The idea was that the initial download link stopped working after a certain point (possibly leading to a 404 page), after the beta had been downloaded a certain number of times.

[Hahex and Oshawott]

Two's kinda... To be fair, the intro is kinda an omnipotent perspective world building thing. I could put the full explanation, but in the original draft of ver 2 (before i typed it up and put it up here), it felt clunky, awkward, and out of place. I felt that it would both bore readers, and annoy people who actually would have known how the thing would have worked. Thus why I was so vague. Would it be better if I changed it to "And that's all most people wanted to know." ?

I can see what you mean, it is a bit of a dilemma. The way it is now is probably better than going overly complicated into details. Still, the way it's phrased with "the simple version" still indicates that there's a longer version somewhere. "Simply put" or "to put it simply" or even "in layman's terms" could be some nice alternatives.

[Danatales]

I'm really quite curious to see where this is going! 8U That second intro posted is really got that key factor of piquing my interest and making me want to see what happens. I don't too much critique wise yet that other people aren't saying. I'm excited to see Chapter 1, there's some good ideas afoot here.

[SirBlaziken]

I also can't wait for the first chapter. This is a really cool idea for a story. The bakugan-like elemental scheme was a great idea too.

[OpalRhea]

Did another edit. mostly minor nitpicks of my own. tried to incorporate everything i've been told. Chapter one coming soon